Entry 49 by Oluwatosin Bayeri

I am very worried because I don’t know how this problem started and when it is going to end. I am also worried because I don’t know what this problem is that is growing in my stomach. At least if I know what it is, I can find a way to solve it.

But I have a feeling that it has to do with Rosco. I just feel it! And I also have a feeling that if I tell him, he might not like it. But who likes to be linked with problems anyway? The fool! He doesn’t ever want people to see us together. If only they know that I have him wrapped around my little finger.

But they don’t need to know anything. All of them are just busybodies who like to poke their nose into other people’s business. And the annoying thing about them is that they’re never ready to help. Just looking for something to laugh about. Their lives must be terribly dull for them to be interested in other people’s business-especially people like me.

I don’t mind them. Except for those who want to make trouble, then I show them the other side of me and then they get more than what they wanted. Just like that one I told you about earlier, that one that called me “Reveren Sistaa.” Useless people!

I think I want to lie down and rest a bit. These days, I sleep more often because I feel tired-very very tired. I know that something is happening to me but I don’t know what it is. And I’m not ready to tell anybody yet. Because I need to know what it is before I tell anybody.

How can you just tell somebody about something you don’t know, especially when it is about yourself. Isn’t that foolishness? Do you want to confuse the person? My grandmother used to say that you have to be sure of what you want to say, before you say it, so that you won’t confuse the person you want to say it to.

But I don’t even have anybody to tell, because it doesn’t concern anybody. The only person I will tell and that is if it is necessary, is Rosco because it concerns him. You know I told you earlier too, that I have a feeling that this problem has to do with him somehow. But that will be when the right time comes.

Don’t ask me how I will know when the right time comes, I will just know.  And don’t bother to ask me how I will tell him, that is why I have a mouth.

It’s dark already and Rosco will return with his danfo bus and call me again. Honestly, I can’t wait. He has already started a spark of fire inside me that is growing bigger and bigger every blessed day.

But now I worry that it might just grow wild one day and consume both of us in the end.

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58 responses to “Entry 49 by Oluwatosin Bayeri

  1. I particularly love this because it still ends on the day the story was told about the other madwoman. I think this is one of the very best I’ve seen so far and I most certainly would love to see it in the top ten. Cheers!

  2. So lovely and wat very intresting story,according to d old woman is gud for someone to be well compose Before talking to some one or giving speech to audience.

  3. Wat a lovely story. D most important thing in dis story is dat we should always learn hw to keep secret and not exposing secret word to some we did not know and d one we knew….

  4. Whao! This is just the perfect end to the story. This is my best I’d read so far and it tells the end of the story. Thimbs up Tosin Baiyeri. Cheers.

  5. Oluwatosin….(grinning) na u wan take my spot for top ten. I no go gree. Lovely story you have. And wonderful writer you are. If there was no such thing as voting and it was based on judging. This story is one of the top ten story… so the long and short of the matter is that… I voted for you. You can read my story (Entry 17) on http://bit.ly/entry17 and vote if it pleases you. Gracias

  6. Wow! What an interesting story. It flows so naturally! Well done Tosin. You are the best. You have my vote.

  7. Go Tyse. I‘m ur number one fan. U‘ve got very rich lines, good writing styles, systematique application of figures of speech and ur voted

  8. Beautiful and concise…and I want to know ‘that thing’ that bothers you when you eventually figure it out (smiles). So, I will be back to read the next edition with another conclusive ending.
    Good thinking!

  9. I like and vote for this story. Just in case I can’t vote because the button doesn’t process the request.

    Regards

  10. This is so interesting. I particularly like how real the story is. I think it deserves to scale through into the finals. I cast my vote. Well done sis Tosin!

  11. Nice write up you’ve got there Tosin. well composed, got the message. thumb up dear.you got my vote.see you at the top.

  12. Wow, a beautiful story line with the plot, setting and character wisely organised. I most particularly liked the traditional undertone and the conciseness. I give you a hundred % pass mark Tosin. Award winning,indeed.

  13. interesting piece. You took a personal and introspective perspective that most writers will ignore, which was one of the focal points the writer tried to highlight. Kudos love!

  14. Well composed as usual. This a very creative thinking and full of suspence. Thumb up. You’re already amongst d top ten.

  15. Wow Wow Wow!!! Dis is so incredible, beautiful write up…I celebrate you!!! Cheers!!!

  16. Goodwork. I like the suspense at the begginning and the hanging at the end. But dear, don’t stop here. Press on and break new grounds. See you at the top!

  17. I like this story because of d use of simply english, bcos it talks abt a common nigerian woman.

  18. I will evaluate your composition on 3basic Content, Moral and connection.

    Content -58%, it is well composed but it suffer average composition ingredients like FOS, idioms among others.

    Moral-50%, justified to yourself but cross examine your fans comments, you got them twisted at first but eventually mislead them, if it serve me right to the extent I believe you feel for one who does not justify your love by action. Just a moral ȋ̝̊̅ڪ a least needed in a right up and it should be solution, good listeners will always want to learn in your story, so provide or suggest a solution.

    Connection-89% upon the fact that your composition ȋ̝̊̅ڪ a pretty stony but nice, the paragraphs are connected pretty well I love the last paragraph but it shouldn’t had stopped there.

  19. Content -58%, it is well composed but it suffer average composition ingredients like FOS, idioms among others.

    Moral-50%, justified to yourself but cross examine your fans comments, you got them twisted at first but eventually mislead them, if it serve me right to the extent I believe you feel for one who does not justify your love by action. Just a moral ȋ̝̊̅ڪ a least needed in a right up and it should be solution, good listeners will always want to learn in your story, so provide or suggest a solution.

    Connection-89% upon the fact that your composition ȋ̝̊̅ڪ a pretty stony but nice, the paragraphs are connected pretty well I love the last paragraph but it shouldn’t had stopped there.

    Overall: ȋ̝̊̅ڪ a lovely composition keep it up.

  20. Content -58%, it is well composed but it suffer average composition ingredients like FOS, idioms among others.

    Moral-50%, justified to yourself but cross examine your fans comments, you got them twisted at first but eventually mislead them, if it serve me right to the extent I believe you feel for one who does not justify your love by action. Just a moral ȋ̝̊̅ڪ a least needed in a right up and it should be solution, good listeners will always want to learn in your story, so provide or suggest a solution.

    Connection-89% upon the fact that your composition ȋ̝̊̅ڪ a pretty stony but nice, the paragraphs are connected pretty well I love the last paragraph but it shouldn’t had stopped there.

    Overall: Good composition keep it up.

  21. in a simple word “Creativity”. it portrays series of events that goes on inside the human mind. you deserve a spot in the next round. keep it up.

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